Avoiding Ambiguity and Redundancy

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1

"Our Family Trip to Hawaii" by Jennifer Mings (2013)

Last summer, my mother, sister, brother, and me took a trip to Honolulu, Hawaii. We were excited to see everything, and couldn’t wait to arrive. After our lengthy plane ride, we stepped off of the plane in a daze. There was two flight attendants who immediately greeted us, putting flower wreaths around our necks. We then met up with our tour guide; and he told us that we would be going straight to Pearl Harbor.

On our way to Pearl Harbor, there was a largely immense amount of traffic, something that aggravated my mother. Luckily, the tour guide was a native of the island, and he was able to calm my mother down.

When we finally arrived at Pearl Harbor, there was many tourists and natives of different nationalities. The first thing we did when we arrived was watching a movie about the history of Pearl Harbor, which included the story of the USS Arizona. During the movie, everyone had been excited to see the USS Arizona Memorial and wanted to get on the boat. After, we all got on a boat and we were driven to the USS Arizona Memorial. It was an amazing, beautiful, gorgeous, and great experience for everyone.

Choose the answer that best corrects the bolded portion of the passage. If the bolded portion is correct as written, choose "NO CHANGE."

NO CHANGE

There were an immense amount

There was a largely, immense amount

There was an immense amount

Explanation

The adjectives “large” and “immense” mean the same thing, so only one of them should be used in order to avoid repetition.

2

Adapted from The Sorrows of Young Werther by Johann Wolfgang von Goethe (1774; trans. Boylan 1854)

That the life of man is but a dream, many a man has surmised heretofore. I, too, am everywhere pursued by this feeling. When I consider the narrow limits within which our active and inquiring faculties are confined, I am silent. Likewise, when I see how all our energies are wasted in providing for mere necessities, which again has no further end than to prolong a wretched existence, I find myself to be silenced. Indeed, discovering that all our satisfaction concerning certain subjects of investigation ends in nothing better than a passive resignation, while we amuse ourselves painting our prison-walls with bright figures and brilliant landscapes—when I consider all this Wilhelm—I am silent. I examine my own being, and find there a world, but a world rather of imagination and dim desires, than of distinctness and living power. Then, everything swims before my senses, and I smile and dream while pursuing my way through the world.

All learned professors and doctors are agreed that children do not comprehend the cause of their desires; however, nobody is willing to acknowledge that the grown-ups should wander about this earth like children, without knowing whence they come or whither they go, influenced as little by fixed motives but, instead, guided like them by biscuits, sugar-plums, and the rod.

I know what you will say in reply. Indeed, I am ready to admit that they are happiest, who, like children, amuse themselves with their playthings, dress and undress their dolls. They are happiest, who attentively watch the cupboard, where mamma has locked up her sweet things, and, when at last they get a delicious morsel, eat it greedily, and exclaim, "More!" These are certainly happy beings; but others also are objects of envy, who dignify their paltry employments (and sometimes even their passions) with pompous titles, representing them to mankind as gigantic achievements performed for their welfare and glory. However, the man who humbly acknowledges the vanity of all this, who observes with what pleasure the thriving citizen converts his little garden into a paradise, and how patiently even the poor man pursues his weary way under his burden, and how all wish equally to behold the light of the sun a little longer—yes, such a man is at peace, and creates his own world within himself. Indeed, he is also happy precisely because he is a man. And then, however limited his sphere, he still preserves in his bosom the sweet feeling of liberty and knows that he can quit his prison whenever he likes.

What would be a clearer form of the bolded selection, “influenced as little by fixed motives”?

equally uninfluenced by fixed motives

greatly influenced by passing motives

being influenced as little by fixed motives

having been influenced as little by fixed motives

Explanation

The main problem with this clause is the ambiguity of "as." At first glance, it appears to be a correlative pronoun—"as little by fixed motives . . . as by." However, upon further reading, you note that it means, "Influenced equally as little by fixed motives." This rendering is a bit awkward, and while it does slightly alter the meaning, "equally uninfluenced by fixed motives" is much clearer than the original.

3

Choose the answer that best corrects the underlined portion of the sentence. If the underlined portion is correct as written, choose "NO CHANGE."

If you are looking for a fast and speedy processor, this is the best laptop I can recommend!

If you are looking for a fast processor, this is the best laptop I can recommend!

If you are looking for a fast, speedy processor, this is the best laptop I can recommend!

If you are looking for a rapid and speedy processor, this is the best laptop I can recommend!

If you are looking for a fast, high-speed processor, this is the best laptop I can recommend!

NO CHANGE

Explanation

This question asks you to correct redundancy in a sentence. The words "fast" and "speedy" convey the same meaning, so it is not necessary to use both. Eliminating the word "speedy" makes the sentence more concise without changing its meaning.

4

Choose the answer that best corrects the underlined portion of the sentence. If the underlined portion is correct as written, choose "NO CHANGE."

With almost three times as many recorded incidents, the number of diagnosed cases of dengue fever has tripled in Brazil since 1984.

Since 1984, the number of diagnosed cases of dengue fever has tripled in Brazil.

With almost three times as many recorded incidents of dengue fever, the number has tripled in Brazil since 1984.

With almost three times as many, the number of diagnosed cases of dengue fever has tripled in Brazil since 1984.

With almost three times as many diagnosed cases of dengue fever has tripled in Brazil since 1984.

NO CHANGE

Explanation

The issue here is redundancy. "Three times as many" communicates almost exactly what "has tripled" communicates about the number of cases or incidents. The use of the preposition since, requires the present perfect tense, describing an action initiated in the past and still active at the present time. The correct answer eliminates the redundancy and reorganizes the sentence in the most efficient manner.

5

Choose the answer that best corrects the underlined portion of the sentence. If the underlined portion is correct as written, choose "NO CHANGE."

This new law is going to create big, huge, sweeping changes in our state.

This new law is going to create sweeping changes in our state.

This new law is going to crate big, huge changes in our state.

This new law is going to create big, huge, and sweeping changes in our state.

This new law is going to create big and huge changes in our state.

NO CHANGE

Explanation

This question asks you to eliminate redundancy and excess wordiness in a sentence. The words "big," "huge," and "sweeping" all convey the same meaning in the context of this sentence, so it is not necessary to use all of them. The word "sweeping" conveys the sentence's meaning concisely, without any unnecessary words.

6

One of the most popular programs of all those featured on the Internet (1) is a video clip show. The format of the show is simple, each (2) week the host, a short but attractive New York native named John Jackson introduces (3) a set of three video clips from all over the Internet. These clips shows (4) people hurting themselves in accidents, getting into crazy situations, interacting stupidly with animals, and et cetera. (5) Jackson introduces each clip comically and often comments on the action with animations where (6) he makes fun of the people in the videos. While the videos are often funny, there is definitely an element of schadenfreude involved in watching these clips. Schadenfreude is a German word for "the pleasure one takes at seeing the suffering of others". (7) Jacksons (8) show are (9) not far removed from popular TV programs like (10) The U.S. Laughs at You there is also a version of which (11) on the Internet. It is an open question whether laughing at these videos is a harmless activity or it causes harm to us. (12)

Choose from the following four options the answer that best corrects the underlined mistake preceding the question number. If there is no mistake or the original text is the best option, choose "NO CHANGE."

et cetera

NO CHANGE

and cetera

and etc.

Explanation

"Et cetera" is Latin for "and so on," and since the "et" is Latin for "and," saying "and et cetera" is redundant.

7

When I retired I took up sprinting. I ran for my university track team a D3 team don’t get too excited and performed as a top athlete in our conference. I fell in love with running so much that I even signed up to run cross country in the fall. Endurance is not my thing and that is part of why I am lazy. I played soccer one season because the team needed an extra body. I was an awful terrible soccer player but it was so much fun!

What would make the underlined portion of the passage correct?

I was a terrible soccer player

NO CHANGE

I was an awful but terrible soccer player

I was an awful terrible soccer, player

I was an awful—terrible soccer player

Explanation

The sentence has redundant adjectives modifying soccer player.

8

Choose the answer that best corrects the underlined portion of the sentence. If the underlined portion is correct as written, choose "NO CHANGE."

Theodore Roosevelt ran as a third-party candidate for President in 1912, which caused serious divisions in the Republican party and may have been the cause of Woodrow Wilson's eventual victory in the general election.

a decision that

NO CHANGE

that

this

it

Explanation

"Which" is ambiguous since it could refer to his decision to run, the fact the it was Roosevelt who was running, or the year in which he ran.

"This" and "It" both create main clauses, resulting in comma splices.

9

Make any necessary changes to the underlined word or phrase in the sentence.

My grandmother’s cat was always nimble, quick on its feet, and graceful.

nimble and graceful.

quick on its feet.

nimble, and graceful

NO CHANGE

Explanation

“Nimble” and “quick on its feet” are redundant, so “nimble and graceful” is the most concise answer, without unnecessary comma usage.

10

The Wowzer 25 (or W25) was regarded to be the best (1) video game system of all time when it came out. Wowzer released the Wowzer 25 in America during the year 1996 (2) as a follow-up to their last system, the Superduper Wowzer that (3) was released (4) in America five years before. The W25 derives its name from its resolution being 25-bit (5) which is something no other console had done before. (6) With 25-bit resolution, a player could finally roam a 3-D world with Wowzer’s mascot WowMan. Being able to play in a 3-D world was groundbreaking; it was an experience gamers at the time would not forget. (7) The W25’s graphics were good and then became even better after Wowzer had released (8) an expansion pack that increased the W25’s RAM from 4 megabytes to 8. (9) As the console grew, the graphics were becoming (10) better and better since (11) developers became more comfortable developing their games for it. (12)

Choose from the following four options the answer that best corrects the underlined mistake preceding the question number. If there is no mistake or the original text is the best option, choose "NO CHANGE."

game developers became more comfortable creating games for it

NO CHANGE

game developers became more comfortable creating their games for it

game developers became more comfortable developing for it

Explanation

The phrase "game developers became more comfortable creating their games for it" preserves all of the information in the original sentence, without being redundant.

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