Tyler wrote: 'We went camping. We slept in a tent. It was fun.' During peer review, his classmate asked, 'Where did you go camping? What made it fun?' Tyler wants to use this feedback effectively.
Which revision shows Tyler appropriately responding to peer feedback while strengthening his writing with relevant details?
- We went camping at the lake last weekend. We slept in a tent under the stars. It was fun roasting marshmallows by the fire. (correct answer)
- We went camping, fishing, and hiking too. We slept in a tent and a cabin. It was fun doing lots of activities.
- We went camping like we do every year. We slept in a tent that was comfortable. It was fun just like always.
- We went really fun camping together. We slept in a tent all night long. It was fun and exciting and great.
Explanation: Choice A directly answers both peer questions by specifying where they camped (at the lake) and what made it fun (roasting marshmallows by the fire), while adding the detail about sleeping under stars to strengthen the tent description. Choice B loses focus by adding multiple activities beyond camping. Choice C mentions frequency but doesn't specify location or what made it fun. Choice D adds enthusiastic words but no specific details answering the peer's questions.