English Language Arts: Creative Writing (TEKS.ELA.9-12.11.A)

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1

On Sundays, the air over our block stalled like a held breath. My father sent me to Tía Elena's to return a dented pot, and I lingered, because her kitchen was the kind of place where things seemed to happen even when nothing did. She rolled masa and told me to press it flat, the way you learn to smooth the stubborn out of a day. Outside, the oaks on our San Antonio street made a trembling canopy. The news had said storms were coming from the Gulf, but the windows only showed light holding. We talked about small things—neighbors, the grocery line at H‑E‑B—and skirted the larger shape in the room: my decision about leaving for college. I wanted to say more; she watched my hands, and I pretended that was enough. When thunder finally arrived, it sounded like someone moving furniture in a distant room.

Which revision best strengthens the narrative's sophisticated craft while preserving its voice and purpose?

Insert a sudden dream sequence in which the narrator becomes a fledgling hawk soaring over the Gulf to symbolize freedom and fear of departure.

Replace the vague exchange with concrete, subtext-rich dialogue and sensory detail: "'You still folding yourself small,' Tía Elena said, tapping flour from her wrists. 'College isn't a bus stop—you can't just stand and hope it comes.' Outside, the first drops stitched quick commas across the window, cumin and rain lifting together."

Elevate diction throughout by converting common nouns to ornate metaphors: the kitchen becomes a cathedral, hands become apostles, thunder becomes the litigant sky.

Add a general sentence about weather to heighten mood: "It started raining harder and I felt emotional."

Explanation

Option B adds layered, character-revealing dialogue and precise sensory imagery that deepen subtext and scene texture without breaking the established voice or purpose; the other options are either overwrought, disruptive, or vague.

2

The night before regionals, our robotics team met in the auto shop because the gym was taken for a choir concert. Fluorescent lights made the bot look colder than it did last week. Miles tested the arm while I watched the clock and tried to sound like a captain. People were tired, so I talked about the schedule, the pit crew, the way we'd stay calm if a judge pushed. Miles kept nodding, loud in his quiet way, and I kept thinking about the vote that made me lead instead of him. Our coach said the best thing about machines is that they do exactly what you tell them, but people don't. I adjusted the drive code and pretended not to see Miles watching me. When the bot lurched and stopped, everyone looked up, and I said we should take a break like I'd always planned it.

Which revision most effectively heightens characterization and voice while maintaining the scene's authenticity?

Insert a metaphor-rich paragraph comparing the robot to a mythic beast and the team to ancient blacksmiths for five sentences.

Replace the coach's line with a direct address to the reader: "Do you ever wonder why people can't be programmed?"

Add general description of mood: "The room smelled like a shop and everyone was tired, but we were determined."

Insert a brief exchange and concrete sensory detail after the lurch: "'It listened to you, not me,' Miles said, half-smiling. The ballast chain ticking sounded like a loose metronome. 'It listened to the code,' I said, and the fluorescent hum pressed on my teeth. He nodded once. 'Right. The code.'"

Explanation

Option D uses precise sensory detail and subtext-laden dialogue to reveal the tension between the narrator and Miles while preserving the setting's realism. The other options either over-stylize, break the fourth wall, or remain vague.

3

Between the metronome's plastic tick and the red second hand on the kitchen clock, my brother and I measured a year. He learned a piece that bent like wire; I learned when to turn the page before he asked. Our mother said to count aloud. Our father rested in the doorway, a hinge ungreased. Winter scraped its knuckles on the windows and we practiced not to flinch. We had rules: no talking when the bow lifted, no apologies for missed notes, no sighs loud enough to count as quitting. When he nodded, I placed the next sheet down, a ferry docking. Sometimes he closed his eyes and played a part twice, as if repetition could sew something back. We stopped when the clock refused to. Afterward, he called upstairs, I'm fine, to no one in particular. I washed a glass more carefully than it needed, and the metronome kept time.

Which revision most precisely enhances imagery and subtext without explaining away the poem's restraint?

Add end rhyme to each line (clock/block/rock) and heavy alliteration to reinforce musicality throughout.

Insert a stanza explicitly stating the brother is grieving and the speaker feels helpless.

Revise two images for precision and layered meaning: change "Winter scraped its knuckles on the windows" to "Winter tapped the panes with a coin of cold," and replace "he called upstairs, I'm fine" with "his voice went up without him—two flat notes left on the landing."

Open with a direct apostrophe to the metronome as fate, extending the conceit for ten lines.

Explanation

Option C refines imagery with concrete, evocative details that deepen tone and subtext while preserving the poem's quiet complexity. The other options impose rhyme schemes or overt explanations that undermine the piece's nuanced voice.

4

On the island, the heat came up from the sidewalks as if the past had its own weather. We followed Aunt Ren through the crowd toward the old church where she said announcements used to travel faster than the tide. Vendors rattled bags, kids chased each other with red soda tongues. Someone tuned a trumpet to a note that made the air tremble. I kept thinking this was my first Juneteenth in Galveston, and how strange to be late to something that had always been waiting. Aunt Ren pressed a program into my hand and pointed at a name she knew. She said, Listen for the part where they read. We stood shoulder to shoulder, and the words rose, formal and ordinary at once. I looked at Aunt Ren's profile and felt the shore under everything—sand, shell, small bones of fish. I didn't take pictures. It seemed like saying later.

Which revision best enhances the piece's sophisticated descriptive craft while preserving its reflective purpose?

Add a brief, intimate beat that braids sound, touch, and subtext without explaining: after "Listen for the part where they read," insert "'They read it like it's still traveling,' she said, the program crackling in my hand as the trumpet found its note again." Also change "Vendors rattled bags" to "Paper sacks hissed and popped like surf."

Insert a paragraph summarizing the historical timeline of General Orders and emancipation dates to clarify context.

Replace "I didn't take pictures" with a rhetorical address to the reader about performative posting on social media.

Extend the ocean-as-history metaphor into a five-sentence conceit comparing each attendee to a tide pool.

Explanation

Option A heightens sensory specificity and subtext through a concise, scene-anchored addition that preserves voice and purpose. The other options overload the piece with exposition, shift tone, or overextend a conceit.

5

Southbound on I-35, the sky turned the color of a bruise. My mother lowered the radio when the rain began to drum, as if quiet could negotiate with weather. We were going to Nana's in Laredo because she'd slipped, because the doctor said rest, because nobody believes rest exists in our family. The wipers clicked like a metronome for grief. At a gas station near Devine, the air smelled like wet asphalt and fried tortillas. My mother pressed her lips together and said we'd make good time. I wanted to ask what that meant, exactly, but the question felt like a small traitor. In the back seat, a grocery sack of oranges rolled with each lane change, thudding, thudding, as if counting. I imagined Nana saying, ay, m'ijo, you brought the sun with you, and I believed her voice could keep the roof from rattling loose. Through the county line.

Which revision best enhances the piece's sophisticated literary quality while preserving its intimate voice and purpose?

Replace "the rain began to drum" with "the relentless rainfall rapped rapidly, ruthlessly," to heighten sound through alliteration.

Insert a paragraph detailing Nana's medical history and the family's patterns of avoidance to clarify the stakes.

Add at the gas station: "At the counter, Mom said, 'Dos para llevar?' then caught herself: 'Two coffees, please.' The clerk slid the cups across, steam becoming a small weather we could manage."

Add a concluding sentence broadly advising: "Include more metaphors and sensory imagery in the storm sections."

Explanation

Option C introduces a concise, bilingual exchange that deepens characterization, sharpens imagery, and aligns with the existing voice and cultural context without overexplaining. A is ostentatious and disrupts tone, B derails pacing and intimacy with exposition, and D is vague rather than a purposeful, specific craft improvement.

6

I kept your secret in the pocket of my jacket, stitched shut with chewing-gum resolve. On the bus, our reflections shared a window, twin ghosts fogging and clearing with the breath of strangers. You said it wasn't a big deal, then bit your thumbnail to the quick and watched the city tilt by. At school, the hall clocks dragged their feet. The bell kept making promises it couldn't keep. At lunch, we sat near the vending machines pretending to know what silence was for. Later, in biology, the fetal pig stared past us with a pearl-gray eye, and I imagined it remembering a field I have never seen. When you handed me a note--folded into a bruised star--I unfolded a map of maybe and maybe not. After practice, the sunset peeled paint from the sky. I walked home with both hands in my pockets, not trusting pockets anymore. That night.

Which revision most effectively elevates the poem's craft while sustaining its voice and layered emotional purpose?

Revise "The bell kept making promises it couldn't keep" to "The bell tongued the air and left a metal aftertaste."

Impose an end-rhyme scheme on each line to create a more formal music to the poem.

Add a six-line allusion to a Greek underworld journey right after the fetal pig image to deepen intertextual resonance.

Suggest: "Increase enjambment and imagery throughout" without specifying where or how.

Explanation

Option A replaces an abstract personification with a precise sensory image that intensifies mood and sound while matching the poem's voice. B forces an incongruent formal constraint, C layers an ill-fitting allusion that distracts from the adolescent tension, and D is too general to guide purposeful revision.

7

The first time I lied to my little brother, it was about gravity. He asked why the dropped screw always found the dark corner under the workbench. In the robotics lab, the air was glue and solder and low, patient humming. I told him the bench wanted the screw the way a drain wants rain. He believed me because I said it like instructions. Mr. Patel handed us the checklist, boxes blank as noon. We were two weeks from competition, and the robot's arm still twitched with stage fright. My phone kept buzzing with a silence I could hear--Dad's name lighting the screen and then going quiet. Tillman asked whether we should tighten the belts or start over. I said, start over, as if that were a thing people did. Later, when the arm finally found the aluminum cylinder, it lifted and shook, like it wasn't sure about holding on.

Which revision best strengthens character development and narrative voice without disrupting the scene's pacing?

Add a paragraph listing the robot's exact torque ratings, belt materials, and control-loop specifications to show technical mastery.

Replace "low, patient humming" with "a cathedral of cosmic oscillations, the universe vibrating in sympathetic chorus."

Insert a flashback here fully explaining Dad's employment situation and the family's financial history before returning to the lab.

Revise "I said, start over, as if that were a thing people did" to "I thumbed Dad's missed call away and said, 'Let's pull it apart,' trying to make my voice sound like a plan instead of a wish."

Explanation

Option D adds a precise action beat and nuanced dialogue that reveal avoidance and vulnerability, enriching character while preserving momentum. A burdens the scene with irrelevant jargon, B overwrites tone with mismatched grandiosity, and C halts pacing with expository backstory.

8

At the county fairgrounds, the dust rose like applause nobody wanted to own. My cousin Lina said the barrel racers were poetry, then took my nachos and cheered for a stranger's horse. The announcer's voice traveled the metal stands, rubbing its knuckles along our backs. We were supposed to be selling raffle tickets for the booster club, but the roll of red stubs felt heavy as a secret. Abuela had taken her hat off for the heat and to show respect, she said, for the animals. Somewhere behind the pens, a band tuned the same note until it quit arguing. Lina asked if I was ever going to sing in public again or if that stage in Eagle Pass had closed me up for good. I told her maybe later, which was not an answer. The sun slid lower, and the lights flickered, testing themselves before the night insisted. fully.

Which revision most effectively heightens imagery and cultural specificity while honoring the piece's tone and intent?

Reshape several sentences to include internal rhyme and strict meter so the prose reads like a formal poem.

Revise "a band tuned the same note" to "behind the pens, a button accordion worried one patient C until the dust settled."

Replace "Abuela" with "grandmother" throughout to standardize language for broader readability.

Introduce a lyrical metaphor about falling snow to contrast the heat and create unexpected imagery.

Explanation

Option B enriches sensory detail and cultural texture (conjunto instrumentation) with a precise image that fits the scene and voice. A imposes an artificial prosody, C erases the authentic voice, and D introduces an image that clashes with the South Texas setting and mood.