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Question 1
During the inspection, the team identified a problem in the loading-door sensor. The problem has already delayed two dispatches. Another problem is the absence of a backup scanner, which could make responding to a future problem more difficult.
Which revision best reduces repetition while distinguishing among the different kinds of problems described?
- The team identified a concern with the loading-door sensor, and this concern delayed dispatches. Another concern is the missing backup scanner, which may complicate future concerns.
- The team found a flaw in the loading-door sensor, and the failure delayed dispatches. Another breakdown is the missing backup scanner, which may worsen later failures.
- The team identified a defect in the loading-door sensor, and this malfunction delayed two dispatches. A separate vulnerability is the missing backup scanner, which may complicate future disruptions. (correct answer)
- The team discovered a crisis involving the loading-door sensor, and this emergency delayed dispatches. A second hazard is the missing scanner, which may intensify later disasters.
Explanation: When a passage overuses the same word, revision should reduce that repetition — but the replacement words shouldn't all mean the same thing either. Strong writing uses precise vocabulary that reflects actual differences in meaning. This question tests whether you can recognize word choice that is both varied and accurate.
The original passage describes three distinct situations: a specific mechanical defect, the operational disruption it caused, and a structural gap that creates future risk. A good revision should use different words for each — and those words should actually fit what's being described.
Choice C does exactly this. "Defect" correctly names a specific flaw in a component; "malfunction" describes the active failure that disrupted operations; "vulnerability" captures a systemic weakness that increases future risk; and "disruptions" is a fitting general term for what might follow. Each word is precise, distinct, and appropriate — making C the best answer.
Choice A fails because it replaces "problem" with "concern" everywhere, trading one repetitive word for another. Repetition isn't fixed by swapping one blanket term for a different blanket term.
Choice B introduces words like "failure," "flaw," and "breakdown" that all describe malfunction or collapse — they don't meaningfully distinguish a latent risk (the missing scanner) from an active equipment failure. The nuance is lost.
Choice D overcorrects dramatically. Words like "crisis," "emergency," "hazard," and "disaster" exaggerate well beyond what the passage describes and introduce inaccuracy. Strong revision never distorts the original meaning.
Your strategy: when answering vocabulary-revision questions, ask yourself two things — Is repetition actually reduced? and Is every replacement word genuinely accurate? Both conditions must be met.
Question 2
Residents may apply for the energy-assistance fund online. Applicants must provide proof of income. Applicants who need help with the form may contact program staff, who will help applicants gather the required records. After applicants submit the form, applicants should retain the confirmation number.
Which revision best reduces repetition while keeping the references to residents, applicants, and staff clear?
- Residents may apply online and must provide proof of income. Staff can help them gather records, and after they submit the form, they should retain the number.
- Applicants must provide proof of income, although employees can help clients gather records. After submission, they should retain the confirmation number.
- Residents may apply online, and those people must provide income records. Personnel will assist these individuals before they keep their confirmation number.
- Residents may apply online; applicants must provide proof of income. Those needing assistance may ask program staff to help gather records. After submitting the form, each applicant should retain the confirmation number. (correct answer)
Explanation: When revising for conciseness, your goal is to cut unnecessary repetition without sacrificing clarity — meaning every reader should still know exactly who is doing what. The original passage repeats "applicants" five times, which is clunky, but the fix can't introduce vague pronouns that leave readers guessing.
Option D handles this balance well. It uses "residents" and "applicants" where needed to establish distinct roles, then switches to "each applicant" at the end to maintain precision. "Those needing assistance" clearly refers back to applicants without restating the word unnecessarily. Every reference is traceable, and no meaning is lost — making D the correct answer.
Option A is tempting because it's short, but it creates a pronoun pile-up. "Staff can help them gather records, and after they submit the form, they should retain the number" — both "them" and "they" become ambiguous. Does "they" mean staff or applicants? That confusion makes the revision a step backward.
Option B introduces new vocabulary ("employees," "clients") that wasn't in the original, which shifts meaning. "Clients" implies a different relationship than "applicants," and "employees" is less specific than "program staff." Changing terminology isn't the same as reducing repetition — it changes content.
Option C replaces clear nouns with vague filler phrases like "those people" and "these individuals," which actually makes the passage harder to follow, not easier. Vague substitution isn't a good revision strategy.
A useful rule of thumb: when reducing repetition, replace repeated nouns with pronouns only when the reference is unambiguous. If there's any doubt, keep the noun.
Question 3
A temporary-use permit is required for outdoor sales on public property. The temporary-use permit expires after 30 days. To renew the temporary-use permit, the holder must submit an updated site plan and proof of insurance.
Because permit is a specific legal term, which revision reduces repetition without replacing it with a potentially different legal category?
- An outdoor-sales license is required on public property. The license expires after 30 days, and extending the license requires updated planning and insurance documents.
- A temporary-use permit is required for outdoor sales on public property. It expires after 30 days, and renewal requires an updated site plan and proof of insurance. (correct answer)
- Official approval is required for public outdoor sales. This approval lasts 30 days and can be continued when the seller provides appropriate supporting materials.
- A temporary-use permit is required for outdoor sales. After 30 days, renewing the event requires the holder to update the location and obtain additional insurance.
Explanation: When editing legal or regulatory text, your goal is to preserve precision while improving readability. The challenge here is specific: reduce repetition of the word "permit" without swapping it for a different legal term that might carry unintended meaning. Legal documents rely on consistent terminology, so a synonym that sounds similar could actually refer to a distinct category of authorization.
Answer B handles this perfectly. It keeps "temporary-use permit" on first reference — preserving the exact legal term — then replaces subsequent uses with the pronoun "it" and the noun "renewal," which refers back to the permit without introducing a new legal label. The content stays identical: same timeline, same requirements, same structure. That's the goal achieved cleanly.
Answer A replaces "permit" with "license," which is a legally distinct term. A license and a permit are not interchangeable in most jurisdictions, so this revision doesn't just reduce repetition — it potentially changes what document is being discussed. Answer C goes further in the wrong direction, replacing specific language ("site plan," "proof of insurance") with vague phrases like "appropriate supporting materials," which strips out the precision that makes regulatory language enforceable. Answer D introduces an outright error: it changes "the holder must... update the location" — which misrepresents the requirement. The original says to submit an updated site plan, not to physically change locations.
The strategy to remember: when a question tells you a term is legally significant, treat any synonym as a potential trap. Pronouns and procedural nouns like "renewal" are safe substitutes; alternative legal categories are not.
Question 4
Reliable refrigeration is important because the clinic cannot safely store vaccines without it. Accurate temperature logs are important because inspectors use them as evidence of compliance. A courteous greeting is also important, although the clinic does not require employees to follow a fixed script.
Which revision replaces the repeated word important with vocabulary that reflects the different degree or purpose of each item?
- Refrigeration is helpful for vaccine storage, temperature logs are convenient during inspections, and a scripted greeting is mandatory for every employee.
- Refrigeration is significant, temperature logs are significant, and courteous greetings are significant even though no script is required.
- Reliable refrigeration is essential for safe vaccine storage, accurate logs provide key compliance evidence, and a courteous greeting is encouraged rather than scripted. (correct answer)
- Reliable refrigeration is preferable for vaccines, accurate logs guarantee regulatory approval, and courteous greetings are indispensable despite the absence of a script.
Explanation: When a passage repeats the same word—like important—for items that clearly differ in urgency or purpose, good revision means choosing vocabulary that reflects those real distinctions rather than flattening them with one generic term. That's exactly what this question tests: precision in word choice.
Notice how the original passage signals three different relationships. Refrigeration is necessary for safety—a non-negotiable condition. Temperature logs are required for regulatory compliance—a formal, documented obligation. A courteous greeting is valued but flexible—no script is mandated. A strong revision honors all three distinctions.
Choice C does exactly that. "Essential" conveys that refrigeration is a hard requirement for safety; "key compliance evidence" frames the logs as formally significant without overstating; and "encouraged rather than scripted" perfectly captures the optional-but-valued nature of the greeting. Each word is chosen to match the specific purpose described in the passage.
Choice A fails because it actually weakens the claims—"helpful" and "convenient" are far too casual for items the passage treats seriously, and calling the greeting "mandatory" contradicts the passage directly.
Choice B is the worst offender: it repeats "significant" three times, which is just swapping one repeated word for another. No precision is gained.
Choice D introduces inaccuracies. "Guarantee regulatory approval" overstates what logs actually do—they provide evidence, not guarantees. And calling greetings "indispensable" contradicts the passage's point that they aren't required.
Strategy tip: When a question asks you to replace vague or repeated words, test each answer against the specific meaning the passage assigns to each item. Tone, strength, and accuracy all matter.
Question 5
To improve the intake process, staff did several things. They did a check of incomplete applications, did changes to confusing questions, and did the scheduling of interpreters before appointment dates.
Which revision replaces repetitive, general wording with specific verbs while preserving all three staff actions?
- To improve intake, staff screened applications for missing information, revised confusing questions, and scheduled interpreters before appointment dates. (correct answer)
- To improve intake, staff rejected incomplete applications, replaced disputed questions, and assigned interpreters to conduct all scheduled appointments.
- To improve intake, staff performed application checks, made questionnaire changes, and completed interpreter scheduling before appointments occurred.
- To improve intake, staff reviewed applicant concerns, clarified interpreter questions, and rescheduled appointments that lacked required documentation.
Explanation: When a passage uses vague, repetitive phrasing like "did a check," "did changes," and "did the scheduling," good revision replaces those weak constructions with precise, active verbs — without dropping or altering any of the original actions. That's exactly what this question tests.
The original passage describes three staff actions: checking incomplete applications, changing confusing questions, and scheduling interpreters. A strong revision captures all three with specific verbs. Answer A does this cleanly: "screened applications for missing information" replaces "did a check of incomplete applications," "revised confusing questions" replaces "did changes to confusing questions," and "scheduled interpreters before appointment dates" preserves the third action word-for-word. Every original action is present, and the vague "did + noun" pattern is gone.
Answer B fails because it distorts the meaning of two actions. "Rejected incomplete applications" changes what staff did — they checked for problems, not turned applicants away. "Replaced disputed questions" also shifts meaning; the questions were confusing, not disputed.
Answer C looks like an improvement but actually keeps the same weak "noun-as-action" structure: "performed application checks" and "made questionnaire changes" are still vague, general phrases — not specific verbs doing real work.
Answer D changes all three actions entirely. "Reviewed applicant concerns," "clarified interpreter questions," and "rescheduled appointments" introduce new ideas that don't appear in the original passage. A revision must preserve meaning, not invent it.
Your strategy: when evaluating revisions, run a two-part check — do the new verbs add precision, and do all original ideas survive unchanged? If either test fails, the choice is wrong.
Question 6
At the public meeting, the transportation analyst said that weekend ridership had declined. Neighborhood representatives said that reducing service could isolate residents without cars. The agency director said that she would submit a revised schedule before the next meeting.
Which revision uses varied reporting verbs without adding unsupported judgments about the speakers?
- The analyst proved that ridership had declined, representatives complained about possible isolation, and the director guaranteed that a revised schedule would be approved.
- The analyst reported a decline in weekend ridership, representatives warned of possible isolation, and the director committed to submitting a revised schedule. (correct answer)
- The analyst admitted that ridership had declined, representatives alleged that residents would be isolated, and the director promised that service would remain unchanged.
- The analyst announced a ridership collapse, representatives demanded expanded service, and the director conceded that the current schedule was unacceptable.
Explanation: When summarizing what multiple speakers said, two skills matter equally: varying your word choices so the writing doesn't feel repetitive, and staying faithful to what the passage actually tells you. Reporting verbs carry meaning — words like "admitted," "guaranteed," or "demanded" quietly pass judgment on speakers, implying guilt, certainty, or aggression that the original text never establishes.
Answer B handles both goals cleanly. "Reported" neutrally conveys information, "warned" accurately reflects the representatives' concern about a negative outcome (which the passage supports), and "committed to submitting" precisely matches what the director said — she agreed to submit a schedule, not to guarantee any particular outcome. The verbs vary without editorializing.
Answer A fails because "proved" overstates the analyst's authority (stating a finding isn't proving it), and "guaranteed" misrepresents the director, who only promised to submit a schedule — not that it would be approved. Answer C introduces bias in two places: "admitted" implies the analyst was confessing to something unflattering, and "promised that service would remain unchanged" directly contradicts the passage, which says nothing about the outcome of that schedule. Answer D is the most distorted — "collapse" exaggerates a reported decline, "demanded" adds confrontational intent the passage doesn't support, and "conceded that the current schedule was unacceptable" puts words in the director's mouth entirely.
A useful strategy: before choosing a reporting verb, ask yourself, "Does the original text justify this word's emotional weight?" If the verb implies motive, failure, or strong emotion that isn't stated, it's editorializing — and B avoids that trap throughout.
Question 7
Bus ridership increased by 12 percent after the route extension. The increase was greatest during evening hours. Parking fees also increased, but that increase resulted from a deliberate city policy rather than greater demand.
Which revision reduces repetition while accurately distinguishing a measured change from a deliberate policy action?
- Bus ridership rose by 12 percent after the extension, with the greatest growth occurring in the evening. Parking fees were also raised, but that adjustment reflected city policy rather than demand. (correct answer)
- Bus ridership surged by 12 percent after the extension, especially in the evening. Parking costs experienced similar growth because city officials responded to stronger demand.
- Bus ridership expanded by 12 percent, and the expansion peaked at night. Parking-fee inflation also expanded, although the city had not measured demand.
- Bus ridership multiplied by 12 percent after the extension, with evening use showing the largest gain. Parking fees climbed naturally despite the city's pricing policy.
Explanation: When editing for precision, you need to distinguish between two things: reducing unnecessary word repetition and using language that accurately reflects the nature of each change. The original passage uses "increased" twice, which feels redundant, but more importantly, it needs to separate an observed measurement (ridership data) from a deliberate action (a policy decision on parking fees).
Answer A handles both tasks cleanly. "Rose" replaces the first "increased," and "raised" replaces the second — a subtle but meaningful distinction. To rise is to go up on its own (fitting for ridership data), while to raise means someone actively caused the increase (fitting for a policy decision). That word choice alone accurately captures the difference between a measured outcome and an intentional act, without repeating "increased" at all.
Answer B fails because it says parking costs grew "because city officials responded to stronger demand" — the opposite of what the passage states. The whole point is that the parking increase was not demand-driven.
Answer C introduces "parking-fee inflation," a vague and misleading phrase, and then claims "the city had not measured demand," which the passage never says. This distorts the original meaning rather than clarifying it.
Answer D uses "multiplied by 12 percent," which is mathematically wrong — you can't multiply by a percentage in this context. It also says fees "climbed naturally despite the city's pricing policy," which contradicts the passage's point that the fee increase was the policy.
A useful editing habit: whenever you replace a repeated word, ask whether your substitute also reflects the correct type of action — passive outcome or active decision. That precision separates good revision from merely cosmetic rewording.
Question 8
We need a plan that workers can understand, a plan that supervisors can apply, and a plan that auditors can verify.
Which revision removes unnecessary repetition while preserving the parallel structure and the separate responsibility of each group?
- We need an understandable plan that supervisors can apply and auditors can verify during their separate reviews.
- We need a plan that workers can understand and supervisors can apply, while its later verification remains possible.
- We need a plan that workers can understand, supervisors can apply, and auditors can verify. (correct answer)
- We need workers to understand a plan, supervisors to verify it, and auditors to apply it consistently.
Explanation: When editing for conciseness, your goal is to eliminate redundancy without sacrificing meaning or structure. Here, the original sentence repeats the phrase "a plan that" three times — and your job is to recognize that this repetition is grammatically unnecessary once you've established the subject.
Parallel structure means each item in a list follows the same grammatical pattern. The original gives each group its own clause: workers can understand, supervisors can apply, auditors can verify. A clean revision keeps those three agents and their distinct roles intact while sharing a single "a plan that" introduction. Choice C does exactly this — "a plan that workers can understand, supervisors can apply, and auditors can verify" — trimming the redundant repetitions while preserving the three-part parallel list and each group's separate responsibility.
Choice A fails because it collapses the workers entirely, dropping their role and replacing it with the vague modifier "understandable." That changes the meaning and loses the parallel three-part structure. Choice B is awkward and distorts the meaning: "its later verification remains possible" strips auditors of their specific role and introduces vague, passive language that weakens the sentence. Choice D is a trap — it keeps three groups but swaps their responsibilities, assigning verification to supervisors and application to auditors, which contradicts the original meaning entirely.
A useful strategy: when a question asks you to reduce repetition while preserving parallel structure, check two things — (1) does every revised item follow the same grammatical form, and (2) does each person or group still perform their original role? If either condition fails, the revision is wrong. Choice C is the only option that passes both tests.
Question 9
The procurement office conducted an evaluation of the vendor responses. After the evaluation, the office made a selection of the proposal offering the strongest maintenance support.
Which revision most effectively reduces repetition and replaces general noun phrases with precise verbs?
- The procurement office completed an assessment of vendor responses and, following that assessment, made its choice based on maintenance support.
- The procurement office evaluated the vendor responses and selected the proposal offering the strongest maintenance support. (correct answer)
- The procurement office reviewed the vendors and awarded the maintenance contract to the strongest company that had responded.
- The procurement office considered each response before choosing a proposal whose maintenance offer appeared generally satisfactory.
Explanation: When a question asks you to reduce repetition and replace "general noun phrases with precise verbs," you're being tested on conciseness and strong verb usage. Wordy writing often hides actions inside noun phrases — for example, "made a selection" buries the action when the verb "selected" does the job more directly. Your goal is to find the option that strips away redundancy and lets active verbs carry the meaning.
Choice B does exactly this. "Conducted an evaluation" becomes "evaluated," and "made a selection" becomes "selected." Both revisions convert bloated noun phrases into crisp, precise verbs. The sentence says everything the original does — in half the words, with no loss of meaning. That's your correct answer.
Choice A keeps the noun-phrase problem alive. "Completed an assessment" still hides the verb, and "made its choice" remains vague. It also repeats "assessment" twice, failing the repetition test entirely.
Choice C changes the meaning. The original passage specifies that the winning proposal had the strongest maintenance support — not simply that the company itself was strongest overall. Saying "strongest company" is an overgeneralization that distorts what was actually evaluated.
Choice D introduces hedging language ("appeared generally satisfactory") that weakens rather than sharpens the writing. The original implies a clear, confident selection; D makes the decision sound uncertain and vague, which misrepresents the passage.
A useful pattern to remember: whenever you see a phrase like "made a decision," "conducted a review," or "performed an analysis," ask yourself whether a single verb — "decided," "reviewed," "analyzed" — could replace it. On writing-revision questions, that substitution almost always points you to the strongest answer.
Question 10
The mentoring program helps employees prepare for the certification program. The program includes weekly practice sessions, while the program requires participants to pass both a written and a practical examination.
Which revision reduces repetition and makes clear which program includes practice sessions and which one requires examinations?
- The mentoring and certification programs help employees prepare through weekly practice sessions, and they require written and practical examinations.
- The mentoring program helps employees prepare for certification. It includes weekly practice sessions, while it requires written and practical examinations.
- The employee program supports the certification program through weekly sessions, while this program requires participants to pass two examinations.
- The mentoring initiative prepares employees for certification through weekly practice sessions; the certification process requires both written and practical examinations. (correct answer)
Explanation: When a passage is repetitive or unclear about which subject does what, your job is to find the revision that eliminates redundancy and preserves precise meaning — two goals that must work together.
The original passage repeats "the program" without making clear which program is being discussed, and the word "program" itself appears too many times. A strong revision names each program distinctly and assigns the correct action to the correct subject.
Choice D does exactly this. "The mentoring initiative prepares employees for certification through weekly practice sessions" clearly attributes practice sessions to the mentoring side. The semicolon then pivots cleanly: "the certification process requires both written and practical examinations" assigns examinations to the certification side. No repeated words, no confusion about who does what. D is your answer.
Choice A blurs both programs into "the mentoring and certification programs," making it impossible to tell which program handles practice sessions and which handles examinations — the core problem the revision is supposed to solve. Choice B replaces "the program" with "it," but using "it" twice in the same sentence still creates ambiguity: the reader can't be certain which "it" refers to which program. Choice C swaps vague language ("employee program," "this program") for the original vague language, actually making clarity worse rather than better, and "two examinations" loses the specific detail that they are written and practical.
A useful strategy: when evaluating revision questions, mentally check two things — does it eliminate the identified problem, and does it preserve all important meaning? Any choice that fixes one but sacrifices the other is a trap.