Develop Writing Through Planning and Revising Practice Test

Carlos wrote a draft of a short story for class, but the plot is confusing because the narrator changes from first person to third person without a reason:

Draft excerpt: “I ran to the bus stop, but he was already late. Then I looked at my watch and she sighed.”

Carlos wants to strengthen clarity. Which revision best addresses the problem?

Chen wrote a personal narrative about getting lost at a museum. His draft has vague details:

Draft: “I walked into a room and felt weird. There were things everywhere. I couldn’t find my class.”

He revises to make the description more specific:

Revised: “I stepped into a dim room filled with towering statues, and my stomach tightened when I realized the voices from my class had faded down the hallway.”

What improvement resulted from Chen’s revision?