Recent Tutoring Session Reviews
"The student was working on a grad admittance essay. She had a well structured rough draft that provided a solid structure for her essay. We worked together to give clearer organization by formulating paragraphs and also to maintain focus throughout the entirety of the essay. We worked to create emphasis on key points and to be more concise in other areas. I suggested she include terminology relevant to the physical therapy field and word play to show competency and generally understanding of the field as well as to add creativity to her essay in attempt to make it stand out. We discussed the importance of an admittance essay and the ability to use it as a means to explain anything that your application does not readily allow room for explanation."
"The student and I discussed organizational strategies for managing his college applications. We reviewed deadlines and application materials for each of his prospective schools and logged them into a spreadsheet. We also discussed ways to improve his application profile. I left him with the assignment of brainstorming potential essay topics for his application questions."
"The student and I worked on several free response questions she had due for an assignment. She completed the writing questions and the drafting herself. We walked through several different and concrete steps for editing them and then we proofread the final product before submitting them."
"The student and I finalized her college entrance essays using our work together last sessions and her new and improved second drafts. After finalizing all content, we polished grammar and spelling leaving her with 3 final drafts ready for submission."
"The student and I are nearing the point where we'll have about three components of her transfer essay complete. It's a great feeling to be making this type of progress, for her and me both, and the next three sessions will be devoted to finalizing these sections."
"I worked with both students on the last two college application essays they have written. With the first student, I discussed the need to draw conclusions from a lot of the examples she gave in order to bring it back to the main idea of the essay. We also worked on introductions and conclusions and discussed some minor grammatical and punctuation points. The second student and I looked through her essays to make sure they were on topic and we discussed the need to make some of her points more specific and to elaborate on how the ideas she presented changed her or prepared her for her goals in life. We also worked on the conclusions to her essays and discussed the sentence structure in some of her essays. Overall, both girls had three strong essays and I feel that once they look them over again after our session they will be more than ready to submit them."
"I read over the essays the student wrote, and I talked to him about the essay-writing strategy of "show and tell." I got him started on some ways to rework the essays. I told him not to worry too much about answering the prompts, making transitions, organization, or even grammar. The most important thing is for him to tell his story because only he can do that. Everything else I can help with."
"We met at the library. The essay he has to submit is a reflective essay on his writing class and what he has learned in the class this semester. To ensure that his essay would be formidable, we created an outline to direct his thoughts. We spoke on how to use some of his past papers to compare and contrast. We also reviewed a quiz on grammar and run-on sentences."
"This session, we were able to take all of what the student has written and organize it into a working draft. We spent the session organizing ideas so that the essay flows. She added working thesis and conclusion. The body paragraphs were revised to be more fluid. The next step is mostly for editing, and maybe some revision. Most of what is needed is working on word choice and sentence structure, and we should be able to accomplish this in one session."
"The student and I met and reviewed the nine colleges she'd selected to apply to since our last meeting. We spent some time going over the admissions statistics for each school, the deadlines for applications, and what sort of application was required. We then clumped the schools into three different waves, depending on both due date and the degree of difficulty expected based on her current academic/extracurricular activities."
"Today, we dove into the student's college application essay. By using detached, objective language and vivid details, he has created a powerful essay that should serve him well. While he was comfortable talking about his personal life, he had more trouble with the conclusion. However, we have resolved this issue with a powerful ending. While we will continue to work on this essay for polish, the overall content is there!"
"The student and I worked on focusing and organizing her college essay and then editing it down to the 650 word limit. She was worried because her essay was initially almost 900 words and didn't quite have an ending, but she came up with a brilliant way to tie the whole thing together and we managed to cut out extraneous words pretty easily. She has a really strong topic and we were both really pleased with how the essay came out. She will turn it in to her English teacher when she returns to school in the fall and get some extra eyes on it. We'll mostly be working on SAT reading from now on, but I told her to send any short essay or supplemental essay questions my way."