"At today's session, I continued to work with the students on their essays for their essay competition. Both students did a very good job of incorporating the ideas I gave them at our prior session, into their essays.
Student 1 wrote a good draft of his essay, but he did not fully develop a conclusion paragraph for his essay. So I worked with him on that, during our session. Additionally, I asked him if he had any other ideas that he wanted to portray in his essay. He came up with the idea of using humor in his essay, either through a joke or an inspirational quote, that demonstrates the importance of being slow to anger and quick to forgive. I asked him to do some research online, and find examples of quotes/jokes that he can include in his essay.
Student 2 wrote a wonderful draft of her essay. She did a good job of writing an introduction and thesis, 3 body paragraphs, and a wonderful concluding paragraph. The only suggestion I had for her, was to make her conflict solutions more "realistic." In one of her body paragraphs, she promotes the concept of being slow to anger and quick to forgive, by stating that people can easily resolve their conflicts by simply not getting angry at the people who wrong them. I explained to her that this is possible only in an ideal world; in reality, people are naturally going to get angry if someone wrongs them, anger is an emotion and it is not something they can deliberately suppress. I gave her suggestions on other, more plausible, ways to resolve conflict such as asking an adult for help, and talking nicely to the person who wronged you and explaining to them your feelings. Student 2 received this feedback very well.
Both students wrote their drafts. I think at this point, they are ready to start typing them up into more polished drafts. We are having another session in a couple of days, where hopefully we can put finishing touches on their essays.