Recent Tutoring Session Reviews
"The student showed me an essay he had already turned in. He had no homework to work on during the session and no syllabus, so we revised the current essay. He needs work on creating compound/complex sentences to link ideas, organization, transitions, understanding audience, and development of ideas. He is otherwise a good writer."
"We went over the student's essay in much more detail. I color-coded suggestions for rewriting sections of his essay, and explained several ways that various phrasings could be rephrased. Specifically, I encouraged the student to look for places where his arguments were insufficiently precise, unnecessarily verbose, redundant, out of place, or weak. I elaborated on his "weak" arguments by clarifying that in some cases, he contradicted himself, and in other cases, his argument was more supportive of the opposing position than his own position. I also attempted to guide the student toward identifying the general subjects of the paragraphs he wrote, so that he could form introductory sentences and a thesis statement on the basis of those subjects. I tried to carefully draw his attention to the way his various arguments related to the general theme of each paragraph so that he will be able to better identify the proper location of arguments in the future. I found that I needed to suggest quite a bit of language for the student, as he is not very comfortable rewording his thoughts. Again, I suggest he spend a lot more time reading outside of class, with a particular emphasis on nonfiction."
"Student A: We talked through a paper she had written based on the prompt I had given her last week. She wrote out a story in order to work on her narrative writing. We then talked more on how to identify fragments and run-on sentences. She did a really nice job identifying the parts of the sentence and has been able to successfully find run-on sentences within her own work. Student P: We talked through a paper he had written based on a prompt. He was asked to work on adding more details. In the past, I have noticed that he tends to repeat himself in essays a lot. I asked him to work on adding details in order to have more information available to write about. This week, I gave him a simple sentence like, I have a dog, and he expanded the sentence with all the details that would help a reader visualize the dog."