Recent Tutoring Session Reviews
"The student and I went over her supplemental essay for clarity and focus, noting areas where the connection to the prompt could be stronger. She revised the essay and I made a few additional comments. Once those comments have been addressed, she will be ready to turn this essay in!"
"The student and I worked on a few different essays. We did considerable editing on supplements for the college. The goals the edits were to define the theses of the pieces and also to fit under the word limit. We also brainstormed ways to approach the application essays that she will continue to work on until our next appointment."
"The student and I looked at his application to college, which is due in under two weeks. He needed help figuring out what to write about, but once we got some ideas he wrote some good things. We did a lot of work on the question answering why he wants to go to that school, focusing on what he could bring to the community. We also put together an outline for his common app essay, which he is working on for next time."
"The student worked to outline, write and edit an analytical essay of Shakespeare's A Midsummer Night's Dream. We worked mainly on the structure of proper argumentative ideas, supporting them with direct evidence."
"For the first hour, we did the final revisions on the student's college essay. She did a fair bit of final revisions to make her essay directly answer one of the available questions, which asked about a failure you have experienced and how you responded to it. For the second hour, she drafted a short response for application, which asked her to describe one of her extracurricular experiences. She had drafted about 200 words, and she drafted about 100 more words during our session. She also reordered her ideas and revised much of what she had drafted."
"Today the student finished her first application essay. She finished writing the body and conclusion. Then we edited the essay together. Next time we'll make any additional revisions & begin her second essay."
"The student received feedback from his teacher on his second essay, and it was generally positive. We then discussed his working draft for an essay for a college application. We talked about points of emphasis - particularly his career goals and what that university can offer to help him achieve them."
"I reviewed the student's first draft of an essay and provided feedback. I encouraged her to be more descriptive in her first essay, and advised her on how she could create a narrative arc between essay 1 and essay 2. We will be working on her revised versions this Saturday."
"Today the student and I completed drafts of her college essays. One is finalized, and the other we will review next Tuesday. Also for next Tuesday, she is to complete drafts of two of her other college essays, and begin work on her next college essay. She has an excellent idea for the last essay, but needs to adapt that idea to the particular constraints of the assignment--doable, but a bit tricky."
"I reviewed the draft of two of his college essays. I made track change edits on these documents. Then, we went over his first essay in depth. We re-worked his essay in order to make it more specific and to make it stand out more from other essays. I helped give him from a perspective of a person who didn't know exactly what he was writing about, which helped him become more clear, detailed, and concise."
"The student and I worked on two separate college essays. I looked at the prompts to both essays, read through her essays, made electronic comments, and discussed my observations with her. For one essay, we discussed grammar and sentence structure. For the other, there was a word limit, so we had discussed eliminating unnecessary details and adding connections to improve clarity. For both essays, she had written a fairly strong response that met the requirements of the prompt. We were able to improve her essays and sharpen her essay-writing skills for future assignments. I told her to feel free to let me know if she wanted to meet again if she revised her essays further, and also if she needed to write additional essays (to apply to other schools)."
"We worked on the student's common application essay. It is getting better and better. She will need this done by the end of this month. We will work through 4-5 individual essays for different colleges."