Recent Tutoring Session Reviews
"In this session the student and I talked about corrections to his draft of a creative writing piece. We talked about how to make his points clearer and more concise, something that we should continue to work on. I helped him learn and understand how to implement "not only" "but also" phrases in his work to make his sentences flow better. Additionally, we worked on organization and essay/paragraph structure. We talked about what makes a paragraph complete and I explained that it is more than just making sure there are "enough" sentences. The most important skill we worked on in this session was self-editing by reading aloud. He was assigned a few of his own paragraphs to work on and revise. His final essay is due Monday. I agreed to look over his final draft and provide suggestions for any last minute corrections that need to be made. In our future sessions we will work on word choice and continue to talk about grammar and punctuation usage (particularly commas and dashes). We will also need to work more on his general organization in writing. He is a good writer, but does not always organize his thoughts in a precise and clear way."
"The student was not able to email his essay to me, but we had plenty of work to do without it. He will still send it to me before next session. Today, we worked with essay organization. It seems his essay rewrites were not as well organized as the original drafts, so we went back to basics. Working backwards, I asked him to look at one essay at a time. We began with an essay on how team sports build character. I had him identify the main idea of each paragraph. Then he looked at each paragraph and developed it accordingly. For the intro, he restated his thesis so that it was clear and concise. For body paragraphs, he rewrote topic sentences to be clear and concise. He eliminated any ideas that didn't belong and rewrote unclear and/or redundant sentences. We did the same for the second essay and rewrote the conclusion. We had some time left to look at unclear and dangling modifiers. Homework: new essay responding to newspaper article: Should people have a flu shot? He should be precise in his thesis, even if it is more complex than yes or no. Then, he is to do some basic research of statistics (I suggested beginning with CDC). He is to type an essay and email to me at least the evening before our meeting. Next scheduled appointment is our last."
"We reviewed the student's application for a summer program in sports management. We organized and began writing the first draft of his personal statement for the application."